The family grows

Hi,

    妳好.

    Here is my opinion about the increasing use of private cars in China. It is undeniably true that the rapid rise in the use of private cars has brought many problems: serious traffic congestion, air pollution, parking problems and the increase in accidents, injuries and deaths.

    On one hand, the government encourages the development of the auto industry (creating jobs for instance) and also encourages people to buy cars to help the economy. At the same time, however, the government has taken various measures to limit the number of car sales through purchasing policies. This is due mainly to increasing oil price, which are likely to rise further in the future.

     But the purchasing policies are relative. Private ownership of cars in China is a symbol of wealth and status, and the purchasing policies have no relevance if one is wealthy enough. As wealth rises in China, car sales will continue to rise in future years.

     To solve the problems mentioned above, the government needs to increasing public transport usage by improving the infrastructure, to encouraging people into public transport instead of using cars. This is not likely to succeed due to the 'status' culture, but if cars were restricted in city centres, causing more people to use public transport, it would reduce the aforementioned problems considerably. Pollution control is improving throughtout the developed world and the use of hybrid (oil/ battery) cars or electric cars will, in the future, reduce pollution in cities, creating a better environment. 

     To ride a bicycle in a busy street is not safe anymore. Secure bicycle parking must be provided in cities, in preference to car parking lots(! ), which will also encourage people to cycle in city centres instead of using their car.

(It must be remembered that all of the solutions mentioned above come to nothing if there is bad weather!!!).

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Please note; Your English is, in fact, very good. Your knowledge of vocabulary is obvious. Errors are only really in fluency and flow of your writing. All English speaking peoples of the world would understand you, but of course speaking is easier than writing. To understand the fluency and flow of writing, read your piece, and then mine imagining it to be a story for a newspaper. Mine is not perfect though! I would edit and alter some parts, but this is a simple example. When you write, read each sentence back to yourself, then ask yourself, 'Would I say that sentence like that if I was speaking to a friend?'

One other small point - notice the difference in the spaces (gaps) between a . , : ;  in yours and those in mine....... Mine is the right way, and that is for all the written English forms in the world. 

regards,