Geography 2

Describe the most amazing scene you have ever seen.


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I had ever been to the Great Wall before.It is the most amazing scene I have ever seen.The Great Wall is a great miracle created by the working people of ancient China, is the witness of history.The Great Wall is built for resisting the Union invasion of Saibei nomads and built a vast scale military project and it stretches over thousands of Wa Lane.
Here is a strory about The Great Wall .It tells that one woman waited for her husband who went to build the Great Wall back home .But you know it was a huge project,so the woman went to the Great Wall to find her husband .When she found the truth that her husband died for worning out and she cried besides the brick wall for a long time ,then the Great Wall falled itself for being moved.Of coures it doesn't .It is just a legend.

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I had already* been on** the Great Wall before.It is the most amazing scene I have ever* seen.The Great Wall is a great miracle created by the working people of ancient China, is the witness of history.The Great Wall is built for resisting the Union invasion of Saibei nomads and built a vast scale military project and it stretches over thousands of Wa Lane. Here is a strory about The Great Wall .It tells that one woman waited for her husband, who went to build the Great Wall, to come*** back home .But you know it was a huge project,so the woman went to the Great Wall to find her husband .When she found the truth that her husband died for working out  she cried besides the brick wall for a long time ,then the Great Wall falled itself for being moved.Of course it didn't happen**** .It is just a legend.

* you have to ways to say it... try to vary if you can.

** to be on/in or to go to f.ex: I had already gone to the Great Wall

***the verb is to come back, not only "back".. this is a noun if it's alone.

**** You were telling a story, keep the verb tense. And if you prefer add the verb to happen to this one.

 

the other corrections was about mistakes while writing.

 

EXCELLENT JOB, SHAN! :D