Negative feelings

Write about a time when you had a bad feeling. What happened? How did you feel?


Damasil

Damasil (23)

Damasil
I speak:
Spanish
I learn:
English, German
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1997

I remember a situation which I was afraid. It happened when I was eight years old. My cousins and I used to go to the sports facilities every afternoon. One afternoon of them, it happened an anecdote. We did different activities in the sports facilities until it came to the closing time. Suddenly, when we wanted to go out , we realized that the facilities were closed. It was a dark summer night. We got very nervous. We started to shout in order to try someone heard us. Finally, we escaped from that place through a hole in a fence.
To improve my level of english I try to write some stories....
When John saw the car parked outside his/her house, his/her heart started beating faster
What is a police car doing here? John said to himself. it was already dark. It was about four o´clock. He is very afraid of that situation. He went downstairs fastly. John was dressed with his blue and white striped pyjamas.
Suddenly , someone is knocking on his door´s house. It was a police officer. Then, John realized that something had happened to some relative or friend. John was terrified while he opened the door. Good night! Have you free time to ask some questions? The police officer asked him. Yes, of course. John replied to police officer. A murder just happened in the neighbourhood. Your neighbour, Martin, has been murdered. The police officer told him. John was amazed by that confession. What has happened? John asked to police officer. It doesn´t know what happened surely yet, but one of your neighbour heard a horrifying screams from Martin´s house. Oh my God! John replied. I am sorry but I don´t heard anything while I was watching the TV very loudly because I was awake . Are you sure do not know anything about the murder? The police officer asked. Yes, of course. I don´t know anything about it. John promised. Your neighbour doesn´t said the same. He assure that he saw you escape from Martin´s neighbour through the window. The police officer said. It is not possible! I was watching the TV when the murdered happened. John replied. In spite of John´s refusal, the police officer entered John´s house to find some evidences of murder.
After some minutes, the police office come back with a bloodstained knife. Immediately, John was arrested by police. John doesn´t believe what is happening him. He was sure that he wasn´t the guilty.
Suddenly, John woke up and he realized that he had a nightmare

Geordie Lass

Geordie Lass

Geordie Lass
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Spanish
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I seem to have more than one copy of the same exercise.

Sythrian

Sythrian (18)

Sythrian
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Spanish
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You're right! I wrote before my message and now I read the whole text and yes, you're absolutely right. Really bad..

Sythrian

Sythrian (18)

Sythrian
I speak:
English, Spanish, German
I learn:
Spanish
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9810

Dear friend,

please try to write shorter stories. I don't think that somebody wants to read the whole work especially to improve your mistakes. The half of them would be enough.

It is well-meant, ok? :-) But at all it looks very good. Keep practicing!