Travelling by train

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An amazing journey on the train in Africa when I took the train from Dankar to bamako 5 years ago.
I had a remarkable 45 hour journey on this train in May 2008. The spectacular views, and slow way of moving through vast plains of West Africa were not undermined by the inevitable discomfort of travelling on a very old, dirty train. This is not a journey for the faint hearted nor for those who appreciate creature comforts. I spent most of my waking time gazing for hours out of the windows (which didn't close) enjoying the breeze (when it wasn't too warm) and the wide view. I arrived in Bamako happy, exhausted and eager a cold water!"

Mon, 01/21/2013 - 09:52

The most amazing journey I have ever taken on a train was in Africa when I took the train from Dankar to bamako 5 years ago.
I had a remarkable 45 hour journey on this train in May 2008. The spectacular views, and the slow way of moving through the vast plains of West Africa were not undermined by the inevitable discomfort of travelling on a very old, dirty train. This is not a journey for the faint hearted nor for those who appreciate creature comforts. I spent most of my waking hours gazing for hours out of the windows (which didn't close) enjoying the breeze (when it wasn't too warm) and the wide view. I arrived in Bamako happy, exhausted and eager for a drink of cold water!"

Excellent!!

21/01/2013 08:52

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Mon, 01/21/2013 - 09:55

I had an amazing journey by train in Africa 5 years ago. I took the train from Dankar to Bamako. I had a remarkable 45 hour journey on this train in May 2008. The spectacular views and slow way of moving through vast plains of West Africa were not undermined by the inevitable discomfort of travelling on a very old, dirty train. This is not a journey for the faint hearted nor for those who appreciate creature comforts. I spent most of my waking time gazing for hours out of the window (which couldn't close) enjoying the breeze (when it wasn't too warm) and the wide view. I arrived in Bamako happy, exhausted and eager for cold water!"

Great:)

21/01/2013 08:55

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Mon, 01/21/2013 - 10:46

An amazing journey on the train in Africa when I took the train from Dankar to Bamako 5 years ago. I had a remarkable 45 hour journey on this train in May 2008. The spectacular views, and slow way of moving through vast plains of West Africa were not undermined by the inevitable discomfort of travelling on a very old, dirty train. This is not a journey for the faint hearted nor for those who appreciate creature comforts. I spent most of my waking time gazing for hours out of the windows (which didn't close) enjoying the breeze (when it wasn't too warm) and the wide view. I arrived in Bamako happy, exhausted and eager a cold water!"

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Very elegant, idiomatic English.This is top class, literary English, worthy of being published.

Cheers!

21/01/2013 09:46

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Mon, 01/21/2013 - 14:02

I had an amazing journey on the train in Africa. I took the train from Dakar to Bamako 5 years ago.
I had a remarkable 45 hour journey on this train in May 2008. The spectacular views, slow way of moving through the vast plains of West Africa were not undermined by the inevitable discomfort of travelling on a very old, dirty train. This is not a journey for the faint-hearted nor for those who appreciate comfort. I spent most of my waking hours gazing out of the windows (which didn't closed) enjoying the breeze (when it wasn't too hot) and the wide views. I arrived in Bamako happy, exhausted and dreaming about cold water....

great journey... I wish to do it in the future...

21/01/2013 13:02

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Mon, 01/21/2013 - 16:21

I had an amazing journey on the (better = by) train in Africa when I took the train from Dankar to Bamako 5 years ago. I had a remarkable 45 hour journey on this train in May 2008. The spectacular views, and slow way of moving (better = pace) through the vast plains of West Africa were not undermined by (better = lost on) the inevitable discomfort of travelling on a very old, and dirty train. This is not a journey for the faint-hearted, nor for those who appreciate creature comforts. I spent most of my waking time gazing for hours out (of) the windows (which didn't close), enjoying the breeze (when it wasn't too warm), and the wide (better = vast) view. I arrived in Bamako happy, exhausted and eager for some cold water!"

I hightlighted TRAIN because you used it twice. It would sound better if you used a different word like 'a trip'.

I had an amazing journey by train in Africa when I took a trip from Dankar to Bamako 5 years ago. I had a remarkable 45 hour journey on this train in May 2008. The spectacular views and slow pace through the vast plains of West Africa were not lost on the inevitable discomfort of traveling on a very old, and dirty train. This is not a journey for the faint-hearted, nor for those who appreciate creature comforts. I spent most of my waking time, gazing for hours out the windows (which would not close), enjoying the breeze (when it wasn't too warm) and the vast view(s). I arrived in Bamako happy, exhausted and eager for some cold water!

21/01/2013 15:21

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Mon, 01/21/2013 - 17:53

An amazing journey on the train in Africa when I took the train from Dankar to Bamako 5 years ago. I had a remarkable 45 hour journey on this train in May 2008. The spectacular views, and slow way of moving through the vast plains of West Africa were not undermined by the inevitable discomfort of travelling on a very old, dirty train. This is not a journey for the faint-hearted nor for those who appreciate creature comforts. I spent most of my waking time gazing for hours out of the windows (which didn't close) enjoying the breeze (when it wasn't too warm) and the wide view. I arrived in Bamako happy, exhausted and eager for a cold drink of water!"

Brilliant again, your written English is of a very high standard now - a pleasure to read and better than 99% of English people could write! Well done and keep it up!

21/01/2013 16:53

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