I wish you …..

This is an intense drama. You can cut the tension in the air with a knife. 

1. I can't stand it anymore.*****I gave her my hand, but she said it's too little (but she still wanted more).

 I gave her my mouth (lips), but she was (kept) asking for more.

I gave my heart, I gave her the body, but she stood there and waited and then said, "It still wasn't enough, not enough, not enough." (good to repeat three times for emphasis:))*****She had dreamy eyes and a loose lifestyle(rozpustnica?) [carefree attitude toward life}. She was seemingly benign, but in truth she was cruel and vain. I was always there for her whenever she needed me. I [was leaving] left her whenever she wanted me to, What more did she want more me to do, so that I could be [stay] with her? *****I left myself too little to defend myself.  in my self-defense [in my defense] She was insatiable and is still insatiable. (and still coming for more.) I gave her my heart, I gave her my body.  She walked away and said: [It's] still not enough.*****So then I cried out: "I can't stand it anymore."********************2. Good! *****I'm lying on the beach and drinking beer. . It's so damn good when I can llie on the beach and sunbathe all day  .********************3. What a shame.*****I know. You didn't write the exam well (didn't do well on the exam). Even though you failed the exam, don't you even (rozkaz = order) think, "What a shame". Don't worry. I know you will improve (it) next time (you will do better next time).

1. I can't stand it anymore!

*****
(Past tense?) I gave her my hand, she said it's it was too little
I gave her my lips mouth, but she was asking asked for more
I gave her my heart, I gave her the my body
She waited and then she said it wasn't enough!, was not enough

*****
(Past tense? I am trying to capture your thoughts)
She had dreamy eyes, and a loose lifestyle
She was seemingly benign, but truly was cruel and vain
I was there when she needed wanted to me,
I was leaving left (past tense) her when she wanted me to,
What more did she want? more, (rhetoric question)
so tThat I could just be [stay] with her? (rhetoric question)

*****
I left myself too little, in myself defense [in my defense]
She was insatiable, still insatiable
I gave her a my heart, I gave her a my body
She still walked away and said: [It's, It was] "It is still not enough!"

*****
So then I cried: "I can't stand it anymore."

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2. Good!
*****
(Present tense?)
I'm lying on the beach and I'm drinking beer coconut water. . It's a damn good when I can lie all day I am lying oin the beach and sunbatheing.

********** **********

3. What a shame.
*****
I know. You didn't write the exam well. Even though you failed the exam, don't worry about it. you don't even think: "What a shame" Don't worry. I know you will do better next time. improve it next time.

Interesting and creative writing as always, it is a pleasure to correct your work because you put yourself into the assignments and try very hard.  You've done really well, what you might want to consider watching is to keep the same tense all the way through the sentence, of course, there are exceptions.  You might also try to keep sentences flowing with punctuations instead of chopping them with periods (full stops). Excellent job! 5 stars.

[The first (#1) is difficult to correct because it's written poetically, and you don't have to obey any grammatical rules when you're writing like this.  But, I offered a few comments.   oh, and yes .... it's totally hot. :-)

1. I can't stand it anymore.

I gave her my hand; she said it's too little. [technically a semi-colon here, but in creative writing you can use whatever...]

I gave her my mouth, but she was asking for more.

I gave her my heart, I gave her the my body.

She waited and she said it wasn't enough, was not it wasn't enough

She had dreamy eyes, and a loose lifestyle.

She was seemingly benign, but truly she was cruel and vain

I was there when she wanted me to, and I was leaving left her when she wanted that to,

What more did she want more, so that I could be with her, so that I could stay with her...

I left myself too little, I had no self-defense in myself defense [in my defense]

She was insatiable, still always insatiable.

I gave her a heart, I gave her a body

She walked away and said: [It's, It was] It's still not enough.

So then I cried: "I can't stand it anymore......"

2. Good! I'm lying on the beach and I'm drinking beer.  It's a damn good when all day I am I'm lying on the beach all day and sunbathing.

3. What a shame. I know. You didn't write the do well on the exam well. Even though you failed the exam, you don't even think: "What a shame"  Don't worry. I know you will improve it next time.

GREAT WORK!