At the bar

Usually I visit a bar with friends. More often we visit a bar in the hot weather. There we order the soft drinks or the milk shake. Sometimes in a bar I celebrate my birthday. For their guests I order drinks: a aperitif, a vodka, a table wines, and a snacks. In a bar we dance and have fun.

Correction:  I like to visit a bar with my friends. Often we visit a bar in the hot weather. We order some soft drinks or a milk shake. Sometimes in the bar I celebrate my birthday. For the guests I order drinks, a aperitif,  vodka, table wines, and some snacks. In the bar we dance and have fun.

I don't know your word aperitif. 

Usually I visit a bar with friends. More often we visit a bar in the hot weather. There we order the soft drinks or the milk shake. Sometimes in a bar I celebrate my birthday. For their guests I order drinks: a aperitif, a vodka, a table wines, and a snacks. In a bar we dance and have fun.

I usually visit a bar with friends. We visit a bar more often during the hot weather. Once there, we order soft drinks and milk shakes. Sometimes, I celebrate my birthday in a bar. In those cases, I order drinks for my guests: aperitif (appetizers), vodkas, table wines, and snacks. In a bar we can dance and having fun.

Мне кажется, что я уже исправил это упражнение выше, моя дорогая.

Фил.