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gwendoline59

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gwendoline59
I speak:
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I learn:
English, Spanish, Italian, Russian
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Hi friends :-) I have already done the exercise of Busuu :p
I have an exercise for the school, can you correct me the mistakes, please?
" My name is Gwendoline. I'm going to speak about the motion: Students should be rewarded with money when they get very good results. First of all, students who work hard deserve an award. In fact, they pass their time on the homework instead of play. No matter how hard they worked, students will have better marks, so it can improve the level of the school. Moreover, with their good marks, they will be able to enter in all universities. Despite their lack of brave, they will try to do more efforts and for consequently they will have to work hard and there will be less delinquance. Enven if they have bad marks, they will persevere to have the money. Indeed, students need money because we are in a society of consommation. Finally, in my opinion, it's a good idea because students are motivated to have good marks. "
Thanks in advance and see you soon ! ;-) Gwendoline

 " My name is Gwendoline. I'm going to speak about the motion. Students should be rewarded with money when they get very good results. First of all, students who work hard deserve an award. In fact, they spend their time on the homework instead of playing. No matter how hard they worked, students will have better marks, so it can improve the level at school. Moreover, with their good marks, they will be able to enter any university. Despite their lack of courage, they will try to make more efforts and for consequently they will have to work hard and there will be less delinquance. Enven if they have bad marks, they will persevere to have the money. Indeed, students need money because we are in a society of consommation. Finally, in my opinion, it's a good idea because students are motivated to have good marks. " Thanks in advance and see you soon ! ;-) Gwendoline

Hope this helps Gwendoline, good luck :)

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I speak:
English, Russian, Ukrainian, Portuguese (Portugal)
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German, Japanese, Chinese
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Hi friends :-) I have already done the exercise of Busuu :p

I have an exercise for the school, can you correct (me the) my mistakes, please?

"My name is Gwendoline. I'm going to speak about the motion: students should be rewarded with money when they get very good results (marks). First of all, students who work hard deserve an award. In fact, they pass their time on the homework instead of play (or simply to be with friends). No matter how hard they worked, students will have better marks, so it can improve the level of the (entire) school. Moreover, with their good marks, they will be able to enter in all universities. Despite their lack of brave, they will try to do more efforts and for consequently they will have to work hard and there will be less delinquency. Even if they have bad marks, they will persevere to have the money. Indeed, students need money because we are in a society of consumption ("... in a consumption society" -> I think this is better). Finally, in my opinion, it's a good idea because students are (OR: can be) motivated to have a good marks. "

Thanks in advance and see you soon ! ;-) Gwendoline

 

VERY GOOD! I hope that my correction can help you. GOOD LUCK!