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These men are as women. They are worried about their outside aspect and want at all costs to erase the work of time on their physical appearance. After an incalculable quantity of intervention, this man is again going to lengthen on an operating table to remove some centimeters of skin of his eyelids. It is an addiction.
Remain beautiful, desirable, I have nothing against. But for it, there is a life style , the sport, to take care naturally of the body. You should not be afraid of aging well. This is valid for both sexes.
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Ces hommes sont des femmes. Ils se soucient de leur aspect extérieur et veulent à tout prix effacer le travail du temps sur leur apparence physique. Après un nombre incalculable d'intervention, cet homme retourne sur une table d'opération pour enlever quelques centimètres de peau de ses paupières. C'est une addiction. Rester beau, désirable, je n'ai rien contre. Mais pour cela, il y a une bonne hygiène de vie, du sport, prendre soin naturellement de son corps. Il ne faut pas avoir peur de bien vieillir. Ceci est valable pour les deux sexes.

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 this man is again going to lengthen on an operating table to remove some centimeters of skin of his eyelids. It is an addiction.
Remain beautiful, desirable, I have nothing against. But for it, there is a life style , the sport, to take care naturally of the body. You should not be afraid of aging well. This is valid for both sexes.

Really good work.

Try 'this man is again going to lie on an operating table'.

'Lengthen' is generally used to describe the act of stretching or elongating something. 

Use 'off' instead of 'of', 'off' means to remove, whereas 'of' describes the relationship between two things. 

For the next sentence, place the object last, i.e., "I have nothing against remaining beautiful and desirable". 

The last sentence is simply a matter of structure, it can be done in many ways; your way is mostly correct but could use some alteration in punctuation. For example:

"But for it, there is a lifestyle; sport can take care of the body naturally." 

Use a semicolon for a sentence pause but when the sentence is not ended. 

'Lifestyle' is one word. Lastly, in sentence structure it is not 'the sport', just 'sport'. 

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Thank you so much for your advices. I'll try to impliment them!!!! Have a good week.

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These men act like women. They care about their appearance and are desperate to erase the effects of time on their physical appearance. After countless number of interventions, the man returns to an operating table to remove a few millimeters of skin from his right upper eyelid. It's an addiction. To stay beautiful is desirable, which I have nothing against. But, young looks can be achieved through a healthy lifestyle, sports, and normal body care. Do not be afraid to age with dignity and respect. This is true for both sexes.

Traduction de Google avec quelques changements.

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These men are as women. They are worried about their outside aspect and want at all costs to erase the work of time on their physical appearance. After an incalculable quantity of intervention, this man is again going to lengthen on an operating table to remove some centimeters of skin of his eyelids. It is an addiction.
Remain beautiful, desirable, I have nothing against. But for it, there is a life style , the sport, to take care naturally of the body. You should not be afraid of aging well. This is valid for both sexes.
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Ces hommes sont des femmes. Ils se soucient de leur aspect extérieur et veulent à tout prix effacer le travail du temps sur leur apparence physique. Après un nombre incalculable d'intervention, cet homme retourne sur une table d'opération pour enlever quelques centimètres de peau de ses paupières. C'est une addiction. Rester beau, désirable, je n'ai rien contre. Mais pour cela, il y a une bonne hygiène de vie, du sport, prendre soin naturellement de son corps. Il ne faut pas avoir peur de bien vieillir. Ceci est valable pour les deux sexes.

Yours is an excellent presentation, you are showing with this work that you have acquired a thorough knowledge of the english language.

I beg to differ in your observation, however, that these men are as women. Personally, I feel that you are doing a disservice to women everywhere by making such a statement. Men like that in my opinion are but a sorry lot to be fixated far beyond normal standards of behaviour as far as external appearance is concerned. Moreover, people of a more mature age don't necessarily lose their attraction, for age holds its own beauty and appeal! No, men obsessed with their outward appearance to such an extend that they must regularly visit a plastic surgeon are suffering from debilitating insecurities or a severe mental disorder.

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Thank you for the analysis of my essay. Be quiet, I can't put all men in the same basket! No!!! I cant to do my exercice simply, I can to work! Thank you again and again, Sir!

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These men are as like women. They are worried about their outside aspect outward appearance and want at all costs to erase the work of time on their physical appearance. After an incalculable quantity of intervention, this man is again going to lengthen on return or go back to an operating table to remove some centimetres of skin of from his eyelids. It is an addiction. Remain beautiful, desirable, I have nothing against this. But for it this can be achieved tyhrough, there is a healthy life style , the sport, to and taking care naturally of the body. You should not be afraid of aging well. This is valid for both sexes.

FRENCH/ Ces hommes sont des femmes. Ils se soucient de leur aspect extérieur et veulent à tout prix effacer le travail du temps sur leur apparence physique. Après un nombre incalculable d'intervention, cet homme retourne sur une table d'opération pour enlever quelques centimètres de peau de ses paupières. C'est une addiction. Rester beau, désirable, je n'ai rien contre. Mais pour cela, il y a une bonne hygiène de vie, du sport, prendre soin naturellement de son corps. Il ne faut pas avoir peur de bien vieillir. Ceci est valable pour les deux sexes.

Excellent!!!!! Great work!!!!!!

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Merci Paul ! J'essaie de faire de mon mieux. Cela me demande beaucoup d'effort, car je suis  quelquefois freinée par mon vocabulaire et la constitution de bonnes phrases. La qualité du travail s'en ressent alors. Il s'en suit qu'en voulant à tout prix faire l'exercice, j'émet des opinions que je dirais pas en Français, car l'essentiel pour moi est de faire le devoir (l'exercice ou le commentaire). Celà, je ne peux pas l'expliquer aux autres correcteurs. Merci encore mille fois pour ta compassion.

Evelyn

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No problem. I think you are doing very well.